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Some people think that development of technology helps to reduce crime, while others think that it encourages crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Crime
 is a fundamental problem, dimming people's prospects in building a sustainable future. There is an ongoing debate about the influence of modern innovations on the number of
crime
. In my opinion, the adequate use of high-tech can help to combat
this
 evil of humankind. There is no question that advanced technologies can help to prevent cases of
crime
.
To begin
, police can find burglars and murderers immediately owing to urban video surveillance.
Moreover
, these devices are convenient to observe the situation and in the cases of danger,officers can prevent them. A case in point would be drones, which have been used during rock concerts in the USA.
This
 preventive measure supports finding places of fights and violence. Apparently, having all features of offences in the digital database can help to find suspects and identify their involvement in a particular
crime
. It is undeniable that modern technologies gave birth to
such
 crimes as illicit commerce and fraud.
This
 is particularly because of the use of the internet. Advanced IT-specialists can easily hack any digital system what can cause data-breach.
Consequently
, personal data
such
 as bank card pin-codes can be used to transfer money from one individual's bank account to another.
Furthermore
, hidden networks
such
 as darknet are often used by criminals to sell drugs and weapons, as it is impossible for local authorities to find the source of an offer.
As a result
, people can organise terrorist attack with items bought in the darknet. To conclude, it is irrefutable that modern technologies improved a
crime
 situation throughout the world.
However
, they
also
 caused a number of offences
such
 as digital frauds and terrorist attack.
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