You recently stayed at your friend’s place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: * describe what the accident was * explain when it happened * suggest how the damage can be fixed.

Dear
Jenie
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Jennie
, Hope you are in pink of your health and enjoying your
hoildays
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holidays
. I deeply regret to inform you that I have destroyed your
laptop
in your absence. First of all, thank you for considering me and giving me an opportunity to take care of your house when you were on
vacations
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. Let me explain the situation
how
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and how
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this
incident happened. Actually, during the cleaning of the
house
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house,
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I was
doing
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the
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dusting on the table, where the
laptop
was. At that time my mobile was ringing and I just turned to pick
my
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up my
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mobile. At the same
time
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my hand touched
to
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the
laptop
and it went down on the floor. The screen was fully diminished and the
laptop
was not working.
After
this
incident, I called you many times but your phone was unreachable.
Then
I brought it to the
laptop
repair, they said it
will
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not be fixed again.
Thus
I made a decision to purchase
new
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a new
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Hp
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HP
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laptop
for you and ordered from the Flipkart app. It will be delivered to your house next week. I have already paid the amount. So, please don't say no to me for accepting the new
laptop
. Once again, I apologise for
this
uncertain damage. Yours lovingly, Roxy
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coherence cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance the narrative flow.
task achievement
Some expressions can be more natural, like 'sorry to inform you' instead of 'I deeply regret to inform you' and 'missing' instead of 'diminished'.
task achievement
You have clearly described the accident, explained when it happened, and suggested how to fix the damage.
task achievement
The letter has a warm, friendly tone which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are well-structured and focused on single ideas.
coherence cohesion
The letter starts with a friendly greeting and ends with an appropriate closing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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