You recently stayed at your friend’s place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: * describe what the accident was * explain when it happened * suggest how the damage can be fixed.
Dear
Jenie
,
Hope you are in pink of your health and enjoying your Correct your spelling
Jennie
hoildays
. I deeply regret to inform you that I have destroyed your Correct your spelling
holidays
laptop
in your absence.
First of all, thank you for considering me and giving me an opportunity to take care of your house when you were on vacations
. Let me explain the situation Fix the agreement mistake
vacation
how
Correct word choice
and how
this
incident happened.
Actually, during the cleaning of the house
I was Add a comma
house,
doing
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
dusting on the table, where the Correct article usage
apply
laptop
was. At that time my mobile was ringing and I just turned to pick my
mobile. At the same Change preposition
up my
time
my hand touched Add a comma
time,
to
the Change preposition
apply
laptop
and it went down on the floor. The screen was fully diminished and the laptop
was not working.
After
this
incident, I called you many times but your phone was unreachable. Then
I brought it to the laptop
repair, they said it will
not be fixed again.
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would
Thus
I made a decision to purchase new
Correct article usage
a new
Hp
Correct your spelling
HP
laptop
for you and ordered from the Flipkart app. It will be delivered to your house next week. I have already paid the amount. So, please don't say no to me for accepting the new laptop
.
Once again, I apologise for this
uncertain damage.
Yours lovingly,
RoxySubmitted by jaskaur1602 on
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coherence cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance the narrative flow.
task achievement
Some expressions can be more natural, like 'sorry to inform you' instead of 'I deeply regret to inform you' and 'missing' instead of 'diminished'.
task achievement
You have clearly described the accident, explained when it happened, and suggested how to fix the damage.
task achievement
The letter has a warm, friendly tone which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are well-structured and focused on single ideas.
coherence cohesion
The letter starts with a friendly greeting and ends with an appropriate closing.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.