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Some people argue that public libraries have become unnecessary because nowadays information can be accessed from home using the internet . Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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Technology is the new headline which makes the human's life easier and flawless.It helps to gain knowledge and providing access to millions of resources
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worldwide
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nternet ,public libraries are not kept their importance and might be vanished in the future. In my opinion,there are more merits than demerits of obtaining
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 internet. To embark with,Internet usage has been increased dramatically over the past ten years because of numerous services
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accessibility
accessible
 is on top of the Internet, out of the blue.
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odern network has a bundle of sources and
information
 in various languages while public libraries have
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accumulated
 books and newspapers in their
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 language and very few foreign
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.
For instance
, Pune city,India, there is a huge
library
 which is India's
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biggest
library
;
however
, people can get only Marathi, Hindi and English books and magazines. Another reason for agreeing with
this
 is that public libraries ought to maintain books in catalogue wise and make a systematic list for them. For maintaining , one has to overlook it; as well as , keeping the record for books
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alphabetically
.
Nevetheless
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Nevertheless
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nternet has a huge data collections for different
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categories
 and each
catageory
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category
 has its own alternatives and for that, one can have to one click of
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ouse. And
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hundreds
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esult are shown on
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nternet. Even, elder people have started to
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operate
 the Internet for current affairs, knowledge and reading books which
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 their time.
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, there is
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 as well.
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The public
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library
 is not only for having
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information
 ;
however
, it is for
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vid reader who wants peace while studying and reading. In conclusion, even though,
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nternet can help the people by
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receiving
 the
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ibrary has its own merit which is
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mentioned
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