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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Now a days
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, The percentage of
crime
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 is
increse
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increase
increased
 day by day which create big debate among the people. Some people think that capital
punishment
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 should not be used for
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riminal while others argue that
punishment
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 should be allowed for the most serious crimes.
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 with, Capital
punishment
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 should be given because
punishment
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 to the criminal
give
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 fair judgement to
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ictim.
In addition
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 to
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, it helps to reduce the
crime
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 rate.
Punishment
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rime set
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 example to other people, which helps to
decrese
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decrease
 the
crime
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 rates. For an instance, In Dubai,
stricts
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strict
punishment
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 is given to the person who
commit
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 the
crime
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 and because of
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 rule
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thier
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their
crime
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 rate is less than 20%. In my opinion,
punishment
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 is
necessory
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necessary
 for the criminal who
commit
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commits
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 the
crime
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.
On the other hand
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, Capital
punishment
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create
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 many negative effects
in
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 human
behavior
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. Many time
person
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people
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commit
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crime
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 due to some disabilities or to save itself from the criminal. So giving capital
punishment
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 is not fair for people who
crime
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 by mistake to save themselves. There are many other options
instade
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instead
 of
punishment
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 like work in
oldage
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old age
 home and help them or work for NGO which give chance to change themselves. In a nutshell, In my opinion
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punishment
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 should
be allow
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be allowed
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 because it
give
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gives
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 judgement to the
victime
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victim
victims
 as well as it helps to
decrese
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decrease
 the
crime
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 rate.
Hence
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, capital
punishment
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 should be allowed who commit the
crime
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.
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