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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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ecent trend that individuals decide to spend their vacation visiting different places either in domestic or
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overseas. It has been observed that most people prefer spending time at the tourist places which are located in their
country
 rather than going abroad and I agree with their choices because travelling domestically can be less expensive and would not create any communication bearers. Vacations in the home
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 always cheaper compared to the abroad trips due to saving in flight fares and visa fees. Generally, overseas flights are costlier than
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domestic flights since it involves a long journey.
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, the residents can travel anywhere in the home
country
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, a family which plans their vacation either in
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nited Kingdom or in Kashmir,
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otal cost of Kashmir trip would be less than the individual’s flight cost for
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nited Kingdom.
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domestic trips. Communication is always critical while travelling to new places. Within the same
country
, people tend to use either the national or the regional languages which makes the conversation smooth as well as simple.
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ajority of the people would communicate in Hindi and thereby making it easier.
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, national trips facilitate easy communication. To conclude, I believe that saving on travelling expenditure and easy in communication are the primary reasons for
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people who are preferring vacations domestically rather than going overseas.
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  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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