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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #people #books #films #internet
It is irrefutable that tourism has taken a mammoth dimension as their people can get acquainted with other nations' features.
However
, some people believe that it is unnecessary to travel abroad, as people can learn the same from other available at home sources. I disagree with
this
 viewpoint and will provide in
this
 essay reasons to support my opinion. Those who gravitate towards visiting foreign countries tend to immerse into the environment of
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nknown culture. Literally, travellers can interact with local citizens and get data from
first
-hand.
Moreover
, there is no substitute for feelings caused by tasting traditional dishes and drinks.
In contrast
, other information sources cannot provide
such
 experience just by showing videos. A case in point would be Portugal, it seems that people would never understand their cultural features if they never visited
this
 country because in the description of
this
 place provided on the internet is nothing mentioned about friendly residents and delicious cuisine. There is no question, that sometimes informational sources can broadcast wrong data to attract people's attention, the descriptions of foreign cultures are not an exception. Virtually, films and books cannot provide evidence to support their words.
For instance
, I thought that India is a country with a poor culture, the prime culprit of my belief was the documentary on youtube.
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ccasional visit to India,I totally changed my opinion as I faced astonishing customs and traditions.
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, people should never judge
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places just by seeing on the internet and reading
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books as there a lot of irrelevant information. In conclusion, I disagree with those who opine that literacy, TV and websites can provide the ultimate material about other nation's cultural features. To know everything about country people should dive into the atmosphere of the place by visiting them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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