Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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remendous responsibility towards spending money on maintaining and developing their regions. It is frequently argued that allocating budget for arts is not required and it should be used on other programs. I disagree with that statement as the culture of a
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is preserved in forms of arts and promoting
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results in tourism which benefits the
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and local businesses.
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, the
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of any
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marvellously captures the essence of ancestral craftsmanship. Well
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preserved artforms become
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eritage for the current generation.
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, in India, villages in the remote state of Gujarat are famous for mandala paintings.
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style of painting has received praises from the globe. Mandala a patterned painting has been dated back from 10th century BC and has been passed through generations. The Gujarat
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has taken all efforts for preserving the craft like providing
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jobs or subsidiaries on food as well as aid during droughts in summers.
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, tourists are attracted
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places that are vibrant and mesmerising for them. There are small businesses that thrive on
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tourists
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artists, museums, hotels, vehicle rentals etc. In a
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survey, by travel guide magazine, 78%
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travellers prefer visiting a
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or place that was well maintained for
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and visited a local museum to see the history of that place. In my experience, an
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festival hosted by Maharashtra
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allured me to see the craftsmanship of a statue of Chatrapati Shivaji Maharaj in Kolhapur district with a bare
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of entry fees of 100 Rs. It was 20 feet tall and the carving was so perfect it seems like the statue was alive. With 1,00,000 visitors from all over the place.
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money is used to support local business and They constantly
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the wear and tear of the statue preventing it for any deformity. To summarize,
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is one of the most prized possessions of a
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and the
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spends capital to maintain them. Well preserved or encouraging activities in the field of
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yields good returns. It is critical for the
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to
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money on
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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