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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. To what extent do you agree?

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Genetic engineering has
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ong history. Today everybody is highly dependent on it. Especially when we discuss
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health, environment. In fact, we can not imagine life without
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it. Human community as well as other living things enjoying
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 of benefits.
However
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erious
threst
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threat
thirst
 to a complete community. Yes! I partially agree with the above statement. Since
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ong time due to
this
 branch of science
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 human to improve life-span.
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 on various virus and bacteria by renown scientist and found various
vaccins
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vaccines
 which help a world many ways. Deadly viruses like polio, Tuberculosis, now are in great control. Another example of it is a human victory over the food shortage in
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poor countries. A great invention in the types of grain seeds
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 to increase food production around the world. If we compare Current data according to WHO about food starvation it is very impressive. Despite
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this
,
such
 type of research
create
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erious threat to
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hole planet. Developing countries used it as
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iological weapon and situation is now out of control. Sino-Japan, Iraq-Kurd war are the greatest examples of
such
 inventions. In
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ino-Japan war
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Japan used
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biological
 weapon on china to control land and kill people. Current incidence covid-19
also
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believe
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imilar track record. In short Genetic engineering has its advantages as well as disadvantages. It is a type of two
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 sharp weapon we should use it wisely.
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if we keep our trust in making
deadlist
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deadliest
 weapons it will turn into
unstopable
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unstoppable
 race.
International
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 community should behave
responsibaly
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responsibly
responsibility
 in
this
 matter.
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