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People think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The process diagram depicts the life cycle of Salmon in approximately 10 years. Overall, the eggs kind of
this
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 to the Smolts which lives in the open sea. After years grows and starts reproducing. At the
first
 stage, After 5 to six months, the laying eggs under the stones and through the reeds in the upper river which the water moves slowly in will hatched out.
Then
, they turned to Fries- which are 3 to 8 centimetre- living in
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ower level which the water flows fast. At the
next
 stage, they grow in termed of Smolts- which are 12 to 15 long- living in the open sea through approximately five years. After that, adult kinds of
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 aquatic creature goes back to
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pper river for reproduction
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the new generation.
Hence
, the cycle will be repeated.
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