The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree?

The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. I strongly agree with
this
statement for several reasons.
Firstly
, railways are way more effective in moving people than roads and private cars.
Also
normally railroads require the same
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of work as roads to be created.
although
are normally less expensive as they require just
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ane for each direction.
Furthermore
, trains are more
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compared to cars. Recent studies suggest that nearly 50% of all
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is generated by private cars that drive on roads. If governments will develop more and more
this
mean of
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they could solve
this
issue. to cite an example, Amsterdam was the
first
city to remove cars and allowing
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to move only by
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.
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they
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able to reduce
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pollution to about 20%.
Moreover
, cars are the main cause of noise pollution, as roads enter all the cities around the world.
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road accident are the main cause of death among travellers. Studies show that
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by car is 40% more dangerous compared to a train
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