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Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming?

#community #threat
Global warming has become a serious problem which affects people in all spheres of their lives. Many international authorities have already taken actions in tackling the threat of global warming.
However
, as
this
 problem is still developing, more efforts should be performed. It
also
 has to become a matter of concern both for people and for governments. To start with, a great number of scientists believe that the most serious and dangerous effect of global warming is the increase
of
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 sea level.
This
 is happening because the ice in
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rctic area is melting which causes several issues. A lot of cities and towns are
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 risk of being flooded.
Moreover
, global warming may change the nature of
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ocean life. In fact, animals may stop orientating in the ocean due to the significant changes in temperature.
As a result
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rend, many ocean creatures were found dead on the beaches.
Thus
, global warming may
also
 harm not only people but
also
 animals, so actions have to be taken.
Secondly
, there is
also
 evidence that the current issue may be dangerous not only in the water but
also
 on the ground. Tropical forests are becoming more and more vulnerable to drought and natural disasters may be more severe in
this
 area. People who live in
such
 regions can experience hard times trying to survive from these dangerous effects of global warming. In conclusion, it is evident that the threat of
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roblem can be extremely risky and unsafe. International communities should be more engaged in solving
this
 issue. People
also
 have to take care of the environment where they live because the life of our planet is in our hands.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • threat
  • international community
  • tackle
  • pressing issue
  • global collaboration
  • action
  • cooperation
  • root causes
  • neglecting
  • responsibility
  • catastrophic consequences
  • efforts
  • combat
  • inspiration
  • further action
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