It is responsibility of the developed countries to provide aid to the developing countries. Do you agree or disagree.

In the era of globalization, it is evident a fact that countries are coming more
closer
Replace the word
closely
show examples
with each other
that
Correct your spelling
than
show examples
they ever in the terms of cooperation, leadership, international tie-ups for open trade facilities. It is always debated among people that it is
primarily
Change the adverb
primary
show examples
r
Add an article
the
show examples
esponsibility of affluent nations to provide all kinds of support to the developing countries to grow significantly. As per my viewpoint, I completely agree with
this
notion and will shade some light in the ensuing paragraphs. To commence with, many emerging developing countries face a lot of issues in terms of poverty, unemployment, poor healthcare and education infrastructure an so on. Many affluent countries come forward to aid
this nations
Change the determiner
this nation
these nations
show examples
by setting up
m
Add an article
the
a
show examples
utual international agreement and can easily facilitate open trade to increase the revenue that can benefit both the parties.
Similarly
, they invest an immense amount of funds in the educational and healthcare infrastructure, they collaborate with local universities to impart quality education, so that young professionals can become
f
Add an article
the
a
show examples
uture workforce in the long run.
Secondly
, rich countries
also
agree with the agreement by transferring the medical technology which can help to cure people who are suffering from
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
deadly diseases.
For instance
, a country like India, where Polio is a major disease and so many people suffered from it, it eradicated completely with the help of cooperation among international medical teams from the western regions and could able to discover a vaccine within a short period of time.
Furthermore
, international fortune companies can look after the potential of local companies from
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
poor nations and could find a smarter way to
manufactured
Change the form of the verb
manufacture
show examples
their products and services.
In addition
, they can establish their offshore offices and industries and can manufacture a product at low cost.
Also
, they can supply their products and services all the world through the skilled employees and at considerably cheaper labour cost and eventually can become
e
Add an article
an
show examples
xport hub across the world.
For instance
, China
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
invited so many companies to build their products at low labour cost
then
soon it became
s
Add an article
a
show examples
upply chain for the rest of the world. In conclusion, I believe that affluent countries should come forward to aid developing nations and should invest a huge amount of funds in the educational, healthcare, and industrial sector. So
that
Remove the determiner
apply
show examples
, they can cope up with the pollution which is increasing among these regions that can severely affect on climate change and global warming.
Submitted by Nikita & Kash  on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral obligation
  • Redress
  • Global stability
  • Foster
  • Economic growth
  • Humanitarian
  • Alleviate
  • Poverty
  • Cultural exchange
  • International cooperation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: