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In recent years, television has contributed most to changing people’s quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Technology has been fascinating
the
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mankind for decades now. It has been often discussed that
TV
 has improved the
life
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 of individuals. I, personally in
favor
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with
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this
 statement as Television is the best
information
 provider and entertainment source as well which will be elucidated in detail with supporting instances.
To begin
 with,
TV
 has been seen as the main source of
information
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ajority of people. As by watching Television at home anyone can acquire all sort of
information
 be it political, global issues, environment, technology to name a few, by being at the comfort of their own home. A survey,
for instance
, conducted in UK university has shown that people are far more aware with the issues around the world than in the past and all
this
 credit goes to
TV
, to make aware the individuals globally.
Thus
,
TV
 serves the humankind with the updated
information
 and make them informed with all the happenings around the globe. What is more, Television is
also
 the prime medium for the entertainment of the people. Since there are myriads of comedy and other entertaining channels on
TV
, they yield the lives of people with laughter, happiness and
also
 it assists to keep away the boredom of routine life. And
also
, family members sit together to watch television which
provide
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 great quality time and they get rid
from
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 the work and other stress.
This
 has been confirmed by a recent study in the USA which showed that
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ajority of people has chosen watching
TV
 as their favourite leisure time activity to make themselves relaxed.
Therefore
,
Tv
 is deemed as
the
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 preeminent way for enjoyment. To conclude,
this
 essay has presented that
TV
 has modified the life-style of people by serving as
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 greatest source of knowledge and amusement.
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