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Some people believe that society is becoming less friendly these days. Why do you think this might be? Suggest some why in which this can be reversed.

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resent decade, people
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 less amicably with each other than
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 schedules and fast running pace of
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 for longer hours in offices. They return home with the stress of
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 their
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, employees returning homes after being scolded by seniors often talk rudely to the guards of their residential societies.
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, people are always short in time, they have hectic schedules. They find it difficult to talk to the people in their surroundings.
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, hectic schedules and stress of
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 their attitudes. People
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 can be improved by regular guidance and maintaining
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 balance. Proper guidelines by authorities can be launched to control working hours.
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ehaviour of seniors toward juniors should be supervised.
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, strict punishment should be imposed in case of misbehaviour. Free counselling at health centres should be provided to combat burden. If people are less stressful, they are amiable.
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approaches to improve
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. In conclusion, friendly
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behaviour
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 environment are the ultimate solutions to curb
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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