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Last week a player of the team had an accident and wasnt able to play with you this weekend. You decided to write to him in the hospital . Telling him about the match. tell him wich team won describe the conditions say how you felt about the match

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Hello John. I have been thinking about you these days. We have not had spoken since
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car accident. Though We really miss you
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 our soccer matches
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 the weekends.I reckon that by writing
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. As you may have noticed, it was raining a lot and the field was swamped with a thick layer of mud that really turned the match really menacing. To our surprise we won the match by 3 goals of difference
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 has guaranteed us to reach the
playoffs'
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next
 month. I am really
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 to have a chance to play
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 finals
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 makes me feel very proud of our team so far. We are all
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counting
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 for the
nexts
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next
 matches and I ensure you that if we have all players taking part
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 their roles we will be the
next
 champions. Hope you are feeling better buddy. Cheers. Marcel
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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