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Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to smoke is made freely and with knowledge of dangers. Smokers should therefore expect to pay more for medical treatment than non-smokers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Smoking can cause numerous adverse effects
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uman body.
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 smokers are aware of the dreadful impact
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 their internal body, they still prefer to continue their atrocious habit.
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, it will cost
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mple amount of money for medical management. I strongly
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 agree that smokers will have to pay more than non-smokers for hospital care as they tend to get more sick as compared to others. Since the discovery of tobacco, people were aware of the complications and the direct injuries to
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lungs.
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, media and the governments around the globe, have commenced necessary precautions to enlighten the population about the side effects of
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cigarettes
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, Sri Lankan
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remendous amount of monetary funds to continue the anti-smoking campaign and to inform the public about the complications of smoking.
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, despite the
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 attempts initiated by the local authorities, people still opt to smoke without considering the additional expenditure on
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. It is evident, that smoking is associated with multiple
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 conditions.
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, nicotine can precipitate certain cardiac diseases and can result in increased morbidity.
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, recent research reveals tobacco is responsible for increased
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prevalence
 of myocardial infarction among young smokers.
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,
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kyrocketing incidence of diseases among smokers can result in raised expenditure among smokers as compared to the general public. In conclusion, smokers are more prone
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 diseases than others. They will continue their use of tobacco and other substance, knowing the repercussions. Eventually, they will spend a lot more than others for
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 care because they are vulnerable to
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yriad of diseases.

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