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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is no doubt about the fact that homework enables the child to practice their school learnings at home. While some
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, others agree that it should be given
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 in order to be victorious. Personally, I tend to agree with the former
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argument
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oncepts taught by teachers. If the child continues to exercise it
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, it will lead to monotony and dislike towards the subject.
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this
 format, it will lead to cognitive overload for the kid. To illustrate
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they will begin to denounce it. Learning should be made fun! In order for the teenage to be victorious, it is essential to ensure that the experience should be
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my science teacher gave us assignments twice a week. The remaining days she would show us audio/visual and sometimes take us to the zoo or the museum in order to gather as much information. As a consequence, I was able to retain theories from practical experience and translate them into my work. In conclusion,
although
 offering homework is beneficial, it should be balanced with other forms of learning,
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 of giving it every single for the child to be triumphant in an educational system.
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