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Some people say that giving a small amount of money weekly to children will help them become more capable as they grow older. Do you agree or disagree

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To agree or Disagree with the statement that providing
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 to children help to make them more responsible is an important topic. to put the discussion on a wider context, is it beneficial to providing a mall
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 of
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 to kids for their expense is debatable. I completely agree with the statement that, after a certain age, it is advisable to provide
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mall
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 of
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 to kids is essential. in the below essay, I am going to provide some positive aspects to support my point of view about the topic.
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 with, considering that kids completely depend on their parents during their early age. As they grow old they learn things from their parents as well as on their own. Providing a small
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 of
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 may help children to develop their management skills when they learn to spend it.
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 it may help to build their confidence to interact with other and trade skill at
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 small scale.
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 is not enough it should be we guided by their parents.
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, one of my friends shared his experience that since he started providing
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 to his 10-year-old son, his son become more responsible and started saving some
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 out of his
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 for his future endeavour. Despite the fact that providing a mall
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 of
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 in tiny hands may develop a child's confidence and management skill. It
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 comes with a bit of risk,
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 as carelessness and misuse of
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 for wrong substance,
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, nowadays it is devastating that school kids are getting involved in the drug so easily.
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, it is important for parents, to not only providing
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 to kids is sufficient but it should be well monitored. In conclusion,
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 is a sensitive object especially while it comes in growing hands.
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 opine that providing
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 to kids may help to build up their skills
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 as management skill and confidence as they grow old.
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, it may cause serious consequences if it's not well regulated. but its benefits outweigh its drawback to the whole.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • independence
  • financial literacy
  • work ethic
  • effort and reward
  • impulsive purchases
  • budgeting skills
  • critical thinking
  • sense of entitlement
  • modest amounts
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