Some people believe that cell phones have a negative effect on social lives. Do you agree or disagree?

Mobile phones have become an inseparable part of our lives. It is quite easy and economical to connect with anyone in
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raction of seconds because of mobiles.
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egative impacts of cell phones on social lives.
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, extreme use of cell phones causes
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ot of radiations which are very harmful and because of that many species of birds have got extinct already, and many of them are on the verge of extinction.
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, cellular phones are addictive too. Be it, adolescents using mobiles
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and getting distracted from their study goals or adults from their life goals.
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, phones disconnect us from the social world, because even in the era of internet and social media, most of the people find themselves alone.
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ot of health issues because of excess use of phones, ranging from sleep loss to depression. Some people base their life on likes they get from social media, which makes them vulnerable to showing off
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ocial lives of people have changed with so many negative effects due to mobile phones, be it social connection issues, health issues or even distractions.
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