At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Today, in many nations, the population of young adults is more than senior citizens. In my point, there are many benefits with the figure for young adults increasing.

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is no doubt that a large

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of young adults is beneficial for many aspects of society.I maintain that many young people are able to improve the development of

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. For the point of consumption, the desire of shopping is stronger among young people,

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, they will

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hard for buying something

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they like,

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as brand clothes, bags and etc.

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has a positive influence to produce activities. Amounts of young people

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work force

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is enough in society, meanwhile, the factory

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not worry about the question that human cost is too high to afford. One the other hand, it is

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of young adults

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result in

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nemployment rate. Young people have to seek

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to earn

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umber of young adults will face a situation that job is saturated under over

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young people. Meanwhile, the

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of people who is unemployment rise, which

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the crime rate will increase. If People who do not have

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to earn money, they will think

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to earn money including unlawful

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. More and more young adults engaged in illegal

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, which will lead to social chaos. In conclusion, many young people have advantages, at the same time, it brings disadvantages. In my opinion, for

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ocial economy, it has many merits,

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as promoting consumption and providing enough human force.