As a result of growth in some urban centers, the environment in those cities is deteriorating. How could this issue be tackled by both the government and individuals?

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the environmental problems are worsening in many cities due to the progress. In my opinion

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matter could be resolved with the combine efforts of both the authorities and individuals.

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essay will discuss the problem and its solutions in detail. To start with,

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nvironment problem is perhaps the biggest problem world is facing today. To illustrate, the present era is ‘The era of industrial growth and technological advancement’. Though

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growth and new technology are making, our life easier and more productive to individuals

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is harmful to the climate of

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beautiful globe.

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, factories are producing different kinds of products like cloth, tiles etc to fulfil the need of society but are

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causing dame to rivers and earth in the form of industrial waste which includes different type of hazardous chemicals. Protecting the environment is the duty of authorities as well as of individuals.

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noble cause. The Government can make strict rules to protect our surrounding and people and factories that disobey these rules, the government should charge fine from them. There must be

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rovision of imprisonment for lawbreakers. Individuals should keep their surrounding neat and clean and should

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grow plant trees. They should avoid the use of personal vehicles for those journeys where public transport is easily available. In nutshell,

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there is no reverse gear on the path on which

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civilization has moved

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there are some steps that can be taken to minimize the threat to surroundings and involvement of both government and individuals is must for it.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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As a result of growth in some urban centers, the environment in those cities is deteriorating. How could this issue be tackled by both the government and individuals?

Fully explain your ideas

Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

Nowadays, some people choose to have their first child at an older age. Do the advantages of having children at an older age outweigh the disadvantages?

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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?