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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Travelling abroad or migrating to any other country has become a trend. Nowadays people are more interested in working or study abroad for their career benefits,
although
 it has some positive & negative sides. Wandering to different places was always been beneficial for humans as we consider it from the psychological aspects it has always shown impressive mental growth in individuals. So the question is raises how flying to the new sites can be good for the people. To support
this
,
for instance
, the CEO of Microsoft is nothing but an Indian expatriate, he found decent opportunities for his career there in the United States of America.
Moreover
, he was
first
 served as a technology adviser for the company later his skills got acknowledged by the company higher-ups for the post chief executive officer. His journey to becoming the leader of the world's leading company is started with leaving his own provincial, it clearly reveals us when life doesn't open the door that you are knocking try another one.
On the other hand
, settling down in non-native nation cannot be as righteous as it has been in terms of growth.
In addition
 to it, the cultural difference can be a major factor.
For example
, If we look from a personal perspective who newly arrived in a foreign country,He may not entertain the regional rituals of his new surroundings or fear of being criticised if not able to adopt things he new to them.
Furthermore
, it has always the anxiety of loneliness. It has been seen in many international students who come abroad to continue their higher studies, some get used to it and some don't. To summarize, the changing country is never been profitable to everyone, the world is open for the seekers not for the conservative mind people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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