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People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals?

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Sleep is one of the most important things to do for a human being as it helps the body to recharge its energy and
work
 more efficiently. On the onset of urbanization,
this
 aspect of resting is considered as
a
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aste
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waste
 of time,
therefore
 people tend to
work
 late hours and start their day early
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however
,
this
 was not the case in the past. Every morning is a rush hour in the city as everyone is rushing to get to their offices and
work
 tirelessly to build their career.
This
 race to build career comes with many drawbacks and one of the reasons is, it increases the level of
work
 and
life
stress
 exponentially. Due to
this
work
 and
life
stress
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most of the individuals does not focus on taking
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reak and tend to exhaust their energy in creating an impact in their respective sector.
Consequently
, the elevated
stress
 level due to lack of sleep, if not treated can result in fatal diseases. The reduced period of relaxing the mind and body due to exhaustion leads to numerous
health
 issues. Annual report of the
health
 ministry states that about 90% of the diseases like diabetes, heart attacks, high cholesterol and high blood pressure happens to
s
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leep-deprived urban population due to the enormous amount of
stress
 from
work
.
Therefore
, it is very much important to maintain a
work
-
lifelife
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life life
life-life
 balance in individuals’
life
 and focus on one’s
health
 in order to live a healthy and prosperous
life
. In my opinion
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ffice’s must conduct awareness workshops on employee’s
health
 due to
over
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work
 and loss of sleep to reduce the detrimental impacts of sleep deprivation.
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