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Many people believe that riding a bicycle is still the way to get to places. What are the advantages and disadvantages to using a bicycle nowadays?

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Apart from all the fastest and luxurious mode of transportation, some people still prefer a bike to travel in the city. Riding a bike to somewhere is always a good option as it helps maintain one’s energy and more beneficial to the surrounding climate,
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, it is not a perfect option as it takes a lot of time and sometimes it is not safe on highways or congested roads.
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 is not only beneficial to an individual's health but it
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 serves a collective purpose by reducing the carbon footprint and aid in environment conservation of the country. Any mode of transportation requires energy to function, in case of a
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, it requires continuous peddling from the person who is riding it,
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 aids in the person’s overall health as it is the best exercise for the heart and as it does not
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 fossil fuel as the source of energy,
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 it emits zero noxious gases into the environment unlike other modes of transportation. The people of Bhutan are the best example as they
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 a
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 for short distances to preserve their health and environment of the country.
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, cycling is not the best and a safe option when it comes to travel long distances in short duration. The safety feature for an individual riding a
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 is very limited
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, it takes a longer duration to reach the destination which is not feasible for an individual to
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 on daily basis. A traffic study conducted by the government states that about 62% of the
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 riders met with a minor accident on roads in a day.
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, the merits of using a
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 as a mode of transport outweigh the demerits, if the government can promote the
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 of non-motorized transport like cycling by providing dedicated infrastructure which will not only reduce life hazard but can
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 help in the reduction of travel time.
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