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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education.

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World population is slowly increasing its literacy rate. Now, at least half of the world's population is literate.
However
, in many poor and growing economies, many are illiterate.I hope enough funding for education in the annual budget of all the country can solve
this
. On one hand, online platforms like edx,
upgrad
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, course era, udemy and so on are offering low-cost courses apart from famous universities like MIT, RIT, oxford and other famous ones. They
also
 offer scholarships for needy and deserving.Many are subsidising education to meet the goal of 100% literacy. As per the Economist magazine's latest survey, the world is marching toward achieving its goal of making every human being literate. But, still, we have to a long distance to cover. World Bank has come up with a new project with 200 billion USD budget to help people study in poor countries.
On the other hand
, it is impossible to bring the people who are poor and even struggling to get a one-time food. We have to help them to escape from poverty to get them educated.
For instance
, consider a province in the southern part of India called Tamilnadu. The government has bought up a tailor-made scheme especially for poor who are below the poverty line. In that scheme, the poor kids are offered a mid-day meal in their schools to bring them to school.
This
 system has been proved revolutionary by its result. A huge population of 60% of the poor got a basic education in the
next
 ten years. Now, the scheme is modified to offer two times meal with egg so that the children who lack nutrition due to unaffordability of protein or other nutrition will
also
 be benefited along which helps them to concentrate on studies. As per my opinion, poor students should be given enough scholarships and
also
 should be provided with good food and nutrition to achieve our goal of 100% literacy. Every wealthy government and business person should help to reach
this
 noble cause
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