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These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour.Do you agree or disagree

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Children's behaviour is manipulated by many things and watching
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V set is one of them.
This
 essay will provide a brief discussion about how
television
 is deteriorating children's brain.Teenagers are now more inclined towards crime by watching negative things going on in the world and
television
 likes to emphasise it.
Firstly
, some kids just for being in the limelight, do something that could hurt others.The gun attack is becoming very common in the U.S.A.Children are even shooting their professors if they engage in a heated argument.
Secondly
, Children love watching action movies which is
also
 a catalyst in provoking
violence
. Allowing laymen to keep gun in self-defence seems a necessary thing but if everyone has it, it becomes a bit scary at times. The amount of
violence
 has increased around the globe at an increasing rate.It is noticed that most of the new
violence
 is done by children under 18 years of age.Children in order to look cool in front of his/he pals
,
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 does some crime that he/she are not supposed to do ever.A recent study by Harvard University shows that 80% of crimes performed by children are inspired by
television
. Concluding my essay, I agree with the fact that
television
 causes an increase in
violence
 in the case of young children.The above-provided facts in paragraphs are worthy proof for the decision of agreement.Hopefully,in the future,we will experience less clash by children if their parents and the government take active steps to overcome
this
 hurdle, while children
also
 need to understand the importance of life.
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