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Many people believe that social networking sites (Such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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Social networking sites have become an important part of
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ndividual’s life these days. In recent times, socializing via
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nternet has become very popular and it has few advantages and benefits associated with it.
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it has
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remendous negative
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 on individuals and on our society. Social media is a great medium to connect and make acquaintance with people around the globe,
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 the excessive
use
 and sometimes misuse of it has resulted in
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arious noxious
impact
 on the individuals and the society as a whole. The shift to
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irtual world has left a tremendous negative
impact
 on people’s privacy. People spending more and more time on social media often doesn’t respect the privacy of others.
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 been a cause of depression for many people.
Additionally
, some people
use
 these platforms to spread hatred which has ignited many community violence. It has
also
 become a platform to spread false information about certain people which has implicated their real life in a negative way. Every coin has two sides,
inspite
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in spite
 of all the negative implications, the
use
 of social media has a positive
impact
 as well. The
use
 of social media has not only bridged the gap between distant friends but it has
also
 made
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ossible to express once views/ideas to the larger audience. These
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 people connected to the world and to
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ndividual’s distant relative and friends. Undoubtedly, the negative implications are far more evident than the positive impacts in today’s world.
However
, these impacts can be reduced by using social sites in a controlled and responsible manner and understanding the concept of privacy which has been forgotten since the advent of virtual socializing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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