Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people would argue that utilising authority funds to promote artist is not a good choice for using their taxes.
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overnment to release their funds in some other activities which are common for all, I believe that
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overnment should encourage artists to represent their nation worldwide through their talent. On the one hand, citizens of a country don't like state institutions spending their
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money on a particular field. In fact
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people wanted their money to be invested in projects which are used by
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ajority of the pupil of that area.
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, in Mumbai people protest against
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a cinema which was later transformed in a cricket ground without any opposition by the residents.
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overnment should arrange arts and craft exhibitions to literate people about
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culture.
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their actors and artist financially as well as morally, because through
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means one can represent their culture. In the modern world, watching movies is one of the most trending activity of mankind. People learn about each other's cultures through their dramas and movies. For
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, a recent drama named "Ertugral" became very famous around the world, through which we can learn about Turkish history. In conclusion,
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feel good when their fortune is spent on
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activities, it's a good step by the
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to promote
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industry , which brings out the positivity of a society. As a suggestion
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arts mandatory in primary schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • culture
  • creativity
  • economic growth
  • tourism
  • social development
  • personal development
  • merit
  • financial support
  • balanced
  • transparent
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