Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people would argue that utilising authority funds to promote artist is not a good choice for using their taxes.

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people expect from

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overnment to release their funds in some other activities which are common for all, I believe that

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overnment should encourage artists to represent their nation worldwide through their talent. On the one hand, citizens of a country don't like state institutions spending their

hard earned

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money on a particular field. In fact

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people wanted their money to be invested in projects which are used by

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ajority of the pupil of that area.

For example

, in Mumbai people protest against

buliding

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building

a cinema which was later transformed in a cricket ground without any opposition by the residents.

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, I believed that

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overnment should arrange arts and craft exhibitions to literate people about

this

culture.

On the other hand

, the institutions

supports

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their actors and artist financially as well as morally, because through

this

means one can represent their culture. In the modern world, watching movies is one of the most trending activity of mankind. People learn about each other's cultures through their dramas and movies. For

instanc

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instance

, a recent drama named "Ertugral" became very famous around the world, through which we can learn about Turkish history. In conclusion,

although

people

doesn't

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feel good when their fortune is spent on

such

activities, it's a good step by the

government

to promote

this

industry , which brings out the positivity of a society. As a suggestion

government

should

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arts mandatory in primary schools.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

255 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.