Instructions Read the question below and write an essay dealing with problems and solutions. You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task. Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan. Only then attempt to write this essay. Loneliness is an increasing problem in many societies, especially among the elderly. Why is this? How might it be remedied?

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present day and age, there is a rapid increase in

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emotional feeling

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especially among the older people. In

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provide a few solutions. There are various reasons for

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feeling.

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, it could be because of the child not spending enough time with their parents.

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is because they are so occupied with work and other events and

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, they tend to ignore the ageing parents which create

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, it could be the loss of their loved one.

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lderly husband losses his wife, automatically there is a void created. It would affect the entire family but moreso would have a serious impact on the husband since they have spent a couple of decades together.

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option could be to seek counselling support. There are a plethora of counsellors who provide mental support for

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particular reason. I work for a mental wellness company, and there is a significant rise in the number of calls we get for

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children to regularly be in touch with their parents.

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can create a positive atmosphere and a feeling of belonging, and having someone beside you. All that a lonely person needs are someone to have a conversation, be a good listener

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and most importantly be with them. In conclusion, it is the responsibility of each individual to tackle

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and be there for someone especially with the elderly. Some of the solutions proposed above can be taken into consideration to ensure that

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emotional feeling is detected and addressed at an early stage.

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