Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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is
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one of the significant
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in the world, especially in rich countries. As
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one of person who is concern about
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obesity
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a lot, I am keen to discuss that what reason of
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and how to solve
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of all, I believe that income is
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main reason
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obesity
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ecent study, more healthy foods and vegetable products have been consumed by high salary group than low salary group. It means
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low class
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people could not effort to spend money
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their healthy diet. In my opinion, the
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government
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by making new rule
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as increasing minimum wage policy or support to
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low class
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group. The
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obesity
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is education. Some people might not know
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how to reduce their weight
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, how much it would occur critical problems in their body in the future. I had not
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about
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mportance of
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. I guess that if advanced well-being programs will
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reated and educated to people by
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government
or education institutions, that
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will be reduced in future. In conclusion,
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is an important issue in
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modern
society. Many people's life has been ruined by
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or other serious
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problem
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. I believe that
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can be reduced if the
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government
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to try to solve the
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