Money offered for postgraduate research is limited; as a consequence some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary era, researches are being done but the financial support to them is less
then
it requires. It is believed that the authorities should provide required
money
for scientific
research
rather than wasting
money
on less use full subjects. I agree with the
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statement and the upcoming paragraphs will discuss the reasons which have shaped my opinion. To commence with, the
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foremost viewpoint is, scientific
research
needs big financial support financially to work appropriately.
Moreover
, these researches contribute to the economy and students welfare in studies. To substantiate it, I would like to quote an epitome that a recent survey revealed that overall 0.5 million
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research
related to useless subjects.
Furthermore
, if
this
money
has been spent on
science
subjects, it had had
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reat impact on education welfare. Undoubtedly, there are other factors related to some subjects
such
as not all students are interested in
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cience subject.
Moreover
, if other subjects
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the creativity of mind that leads to
the
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personality development. If the
research
related to other subjects rather than
science
would be effective than it can
also
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students prefer other political or commerce related subjects. To recapitulate it, I believe that no doubt,
science
subjects are important but other subjects should not be neglected as it has its own advantages. Mainly the new generation prefers
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subjects other than
science
as they find it difficult.
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