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Please help with the evaluation of the below essay. More and more people are choosing ready to eat food rather than cooking themselves. Do this development has more advantages than disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that the global food market has done rampant growth and people are preferring effortless products to eat rather than grilling themself in
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itchen. In my view, it has a more negative effect on our life which I will discuss in the latter view. The most significant problem is people are becoming more sluggish towards their nutritional cooking and personal health.
Therefore
, a large amount of our society is suffering from obesity which causes heart and other health issues in their life. The reason behind
this
 is enormous growth in technology and food applications leads to order meal in a single click of a smartphone button.
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 is the great evidence in front of us where a plethora of cuisines can be ordered at our doorstep within a couple of minutes. To tackle
this
 situation our government had to take initiative by increasing taxes in ready to eat products and on their delivery
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 so that people opt for more healthy homemade cooking for their loved ones.
However
, some people acknowledge these ready-made products saves their valuable time in
this
 hectic world which
also
 helps them social distancing from crowd gathering in shopping malls.
This
 is because pandemic killed several people and it can easily be spread in the air, so without hassle,these nutrition makes our life much easier.
For example
,many people travelling to some other country choose ready-made food in case if they can not find their preferable foodstuff in that particular area and
also
 very convenient to carry. Personally, I feel that these drawbacks overweight advantages and if we have to build a healthy future than our government had to spread awareness among people and promote a healthy lifestyle for the betterment of our generation.
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