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Compared to the past, more people are now studying abroad because it is more convenient and cheaper than before. Do you think this is beneficial to the foreign student’s home country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Moving abroad to
study
 is becoming always more popular, since more and more students, that I got to know, took the decision to
study
 in a foreign
country
. There are advantages and negative aspects
in
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 those kinds of choices, making it one of the most important steps for each
student
 for a better
study
 experience. I would like to discuss, in
this
 essay, the motivations and the impacts of the
country
 which receive and loss students. Let's start discussing the benefits of getting new foreign students through the point of view of the state. As a government of the
country
, you would be proud of your own education system. Since the
student
 decided to head to your
country
 and not his own nor in others.
Moreover
, you will get some advantages, since the guy would probably work in your
country
 as well,
thus
, he would bring your knowledge to boost up your companies.
Additionally
, having a university with different
student
's nationality would be well-seen from all other Eduction departments in each state.
For instance
, whenever your students get a national reward and they have a different nationality, it is going to incentivize other guys to move in your nation to
study
. Turning to the other side of the argument, losing a huge amount of young adults, because they want to move to another nation to persuade their
study
, would be seen as a system with a lack of education without giving them the proper level to move
further
 with their life. In conclusion, having a greater number of foreign students have a little impact on the investment from the Education department, but it pays off with several benefits that a state could gain.
Therefore
, I say that it is not beneficial for the foreign
student
's home
country
, while there are positive aspects of getting new foreign students
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