Supermarkets should only sell food produced from their own country rather than imports from overseas. WHat are your opinion about this.

There is currently a contentious argument over whether stores should
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exclusively
offer local goods to their customers
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bringing it from
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. In
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essay, I will examine why
this
can be detrimental to a country economy as well as it reduces their consumerism. The
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main
reason that
this
behaviour can be detrimental is due to the fact that the economy needs
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foreign
food. On the whole, the majority of the countries can not provide all types of
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sums
in sums
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themselves
;
therefore
, they need to
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strengthen
relations with other countries as regard found its population needs.
For instance
, some countries are not able to
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cultivate
coffee which means that they rely on other nations that
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for having a good soil do plant
this
type of crop to sale it for them. Another reason why I support
this
notion is that it can
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peoples' choice. Considering that nearly all countries depend on other nations in order to offer a multitude of good as aforementioned
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when
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especific
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store decide to count only on domestic staple crops
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prone them to reduce consumers
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reedom to decide what to purchase.
Thus
, these consumers will probably look at another place which can offer that item they are looking for which is probably produced by another country. To illustrate, the consumers who realize that some item is not imported by the supermarket they tend to order it online, as a consequence, they stop to purchase from that supermarket. In conclusion, it is unavoidable the fact that all supermarkets
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on goods that are manufactured abroad in
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regarding
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attend their clients. If they do not partake in
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process they will be out of the market since their clients will order it from the internet and more than that, it will break its economy.
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