Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

Many adolescent children have their own android gadgets nowadays, which have both positive as well as negative aspects. While modern age children spend a lot of time in their mobile phones which leads to different health problems, I believe that mobile usage in terms of academic learning has far more benefits.
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, tablets and other smart gadgets
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a vital role in learning new things. Students can take lectures from teachers around the world in a more enjoyable manner. If a student didn't understand lectures or misses any lecture in school due to any illness they
then
can access it at their home.
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, during the covid-19 government had to close down all the schools, in these circumstances,all the school continued delivering their lectures through the internet, which were attended by children on their smart gadgets.I believe that these gadgets should be used in limits to avoid
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problems As
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smart technology becomes common in younger people, it
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generates many
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relating issues. Children not only adopt
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for their studies but they
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have a vast variety of games to play with.
This
results in the adolescent student gaining extra weight, eyesight weakness and much more which evolves with the passage of time.
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, WHO released a report in 2019 that children of the
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5 years are 20
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fatter as compare to younger people of previous years. I believe that there should be parental control on these gadgets and allowed to be practice in limits. In conclusion,
although
over usage of phones leads to health problems, they are
also
necessary in the modern world for learning new things,
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in limits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • access to information
  • safety and security
  • entertainment
  • educational opportunities
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • distraction
  • lack of focus
  • privacy concerns
  • social disconnection
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • opinion
  • outweigh
  • limits
  • screen time
  • online safety
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