The internet has caused people to be isolated from their real lives. Do you agree or disagree?

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modern time, the

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in the isolation of individuals from their ordinary

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to a great extent

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is true, I believe that the

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, nowadays people prefer to spend their leisure time searching the web, or playing online games as

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tool of relaxation after hard -

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, using social media affects the relation between members within the same house, persons of the same family have been separated.

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spend almost all of her day sitting lonely in her room searching about the modern fashions and makeups.

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, at the age of

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globalization

, the connection technology is very important to close far distances among

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orld's countries, the earth planet

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, I live now in Canada, while taking my English course with Egyptian educators.

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remendous amount of information that we can get easily through the web.

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as , how cars are manufactured, or how planes fly in the sky. Now, I can visit another place and communicate with people there, despite I am still in my home. In conclusion,

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

247 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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The internet has caused people to be isolated from their real lives. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop children`s life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

in some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this problem?