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Nowadays, some celebrities such as film stars, sportsmen and pop musicians are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which jobs should be highly paid?

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The high incomes of celebs in the field of sports and
entertainment
 have always been a matter of dispute. I agree that they are getting high remuneration for what they are doing but I
also
 firmly believe that they well deserve it. In the following paragraphs, I shall put my arguments to support my opinion and
also
 suggest some other jobs, which should be highly paid. My
first
 argument in favour of the high salaries of these celebrities is that they have a major contribution to the lives of people. They provide
entertainment
 and inspiration and they
also
 bring name and fame to our country. They are role models for society and people follow them and listen to them.
Secondly
, they have a very short career span. Most of the people in the sports and
entertainment
 field start their careers at the age of 19-20 and retire by 33-35 years. Whatever these celebs earn is during these few years and after that, they struggle. My final argument is that these celebs sacrifice their personal life completely and so they do deserve these high salaries. They cannot enjoy the common things of life like the common man does. They are always followed by the paparazzi and their children too always need security.
This
 is too much price to pay for the high salaries they receive. Many other professions require high salaries,
such
 as doctors, teachers, and nurses as they serve humanity so they deserve higher pay.
Then
, there are people working in our defence services
such
 as the army, navy, and air force. Because of them, we are leading secure lives.
That is
 why they deserve higher pay-packages.
Furthermore
, people working in high-risk professions
such
 as fire-fighters and security guards should be paid more and
finally
, people in administrative posts
such
 as IAS and IPS officers should have higher salaries. To sum up, people in the field of sports and
entertainment
 well deserve their high incomes.
However
, there are many other professions, which
also
 deserve high salaries.
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