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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

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Dear Adam, I am writing to express my interest in working at our international
office
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 in the United Kingdom for a few months to
further
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 enhance my skills and to get global market exposure to our products so that I can better contribute to the company and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently. As you know, I have been promoted to assistant Information Technology Manager recently and I am working hard to collaborate with my team to enhance the sales and increase our brand reputation.
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, I have been feeling the need to meet and
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 with our global team members and attend some training sessions that our head
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 in London conducts regularly. I am quite positive that the opportunity to
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 in our company's head
office
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 for six months will
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 enhance my knowledge and give me exposure to the global market trend. I have talked to Julian and he has agreed to take over my responsibilities.
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, I will check my emails daily and be available for any emergency phone calls. Once I get back to the
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, I will endeavour to
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 extra hours to catch up on anything that I have missed.
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, I will need your support to get approval so that I can
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 in my company's head
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 for six months and fulfil my objectives. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely, Rakesh
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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