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Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?

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It is often argued that landing in the perfect job mainly depends on the higher academic achievements
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ertiary educational degree. While some others believe that the relevant work experience is much more crucial. I partially agree with both the notions as it depends on the qualifications required in different careers vary from each other.
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, in most of the parts of the world, people think that attaining a university degree enhances the prospects of getting a dream job which is true for the fields which demand highly intellectual professionals
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 as Doctors. It is obvious, that without a proper medical degree, a person will not be able to cure the sick ones.
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, many companies require their employees to be university graduates, which means
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 is one of the pre-requisites to be hired. It is because the skill and knowledge necessary to perform that task are only offered in university education.
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, there is an opponent group of citizens who claim that experience plays a pivotal role in being able to find suitable and desired working position, as it adds up to an individual's
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 is nought. For some workforces it is right. Cooks can be taken as an example of an illustration. The more acquainted they are with the kitchen environment, their working vicinity, the faster and more successful they become in enriching their abilities and gaining more opportunities to flourish. In a nutshell, I believe that both the assumptions are equally correct in their own places and it solely depends on the type of occupation or profession whether the informal attributes or the formal
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 are sought after for employment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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