Topic: These days there are a lot of TV channels available to view. Some people think it is good to have a range of options but others argue that it affects the quality of programs. Discuss both sides and give your opinion as well.

The increase in the number of TV channels has provoked a critical controversy over if
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is valuable and provide a broad spectrum of chances for people to select, or
this
increase in quantity is
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accompanied
with poor content.From my perspective, many of satalite programs and
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shows
now have very low quality, despite the tremendous which is on the surface nowadays. On the one hand, many people
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argue
that the approach of variety and
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uge number of programs
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those who watch TV the ability to choose freely
bteween
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between
movis
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movies
,
talkshows
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talk shows
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, news, or even
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cartoon
cartoons
. Not only
this
, even in the same category there is
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specifically
specificity
, like different types of films' channels, while one is restricted for action, the other is limited to comedy.
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those people stand on the side of variety as the thought that
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heighten
people's intellect by
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uge amount of information about different aspects
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of
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life,
such
as scientific, sports and current world news.
However
, I can see that these ideas are flawed owing to
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superficial
as well as directed thoughts they provide, programs'
maneger
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manager
managers
are
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usually aiming to enforce their points of view on the viewer, to attract many observers to his side no matter they offer the truth or not.
For instance
, those who take the side of
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government
and encourage what they do all the time, while others who judge the behaviours of countries' presidents at any stage even at important and critical events that need all the citizens to be one hand. In conclusion, the quality of programs content and to what extent it
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the reality is important than how many of them offered to TV watchers.
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