It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. What do you think is the reason for the growth in juvenile crime? What are some solutions?

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In recent decades, juvenile
crime
has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
some people think that
violence
in the media is the main cause for the increase in youth
crime
,
however
, I
also
believe that family contributes to
this
issue
, and there are a number of solutions which should be implemented to deal with
this
problem. There are two main reasons why juvenile
crime
is growing.
First
, since the media offers many contents
such
as violent games and movies, they will trigger their sense of curiosity.
For example
, when people play games or watch movies with violent scenes, they will think more about them, so they are tempted to do what they see on the TV, which leads to solving all the conflicts by
violence
.
Second
, parental negligence is
also
the main reason to cause youth
crime
.Nowadays, parents are too busy working, they cannot spend time with their children. Their children do not have anyone to share about their life, they will be stressed and not feel the sense of belonging in their own houses.
Then
, they want to do something different to get attention from their parents by starting hangout without permissions. They can be enticed by the drug dealers and when young children get involved with dealers that makes them have the desire to commit crimes after getting high. There are
also
a variety of solutions to cope with
this
issue
.
First
, in order to reduce the harmful impacts of media
violence
, the government should supervise the content of the programmes on TV. In fact, they should do strict censorship and label the program as children-friendly, and
also
limit the
violence
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scenes of the programmes.
Second
, Parents should control and guide teenagers when they are still young, limit their access to the internet and make the family’s viewing by selecting the age-appropriate content.
Furthermore
, parents should pay attention to
the
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kids.
For example
, they can speak and listen to their children’s stories, so they can discuss with them about life, what they should do, what they should not, which leads to a tightened family bond.
As a result
, the kids feel loved and
thus
are less likely to turn to
crime
or be involved with the drug dealers. In conclusion,
besides
violence
in the media,
f
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amily is
also
one of the leading reasons
to
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youth crimes. Coping with
this
issue
, we need
the
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cooperation between family and government, so the
issue
can be minimized.
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