With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

Many developing and developed countries have allocated funds for space research to find the aliens from other galaxies and
also
to know about the planets
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like The Earth. It requires
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huge money for
this
project.
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for several years in
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countries
such
as Africa, Indonesia, and Ghana. Let we discuss in
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essay elaborately.
Firstly
, Many nations have shown keen to investigate the new galaxies other than Milky Way galaxy but, its a challenging project and must be required massive funds. For using
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another way; helping the poor nations for education, food, Shelter, and Medications. It is significant factors for those people. They anticipate support from other countries.
Conversely
, the world population has been increasing day by day since the 18th century. We spoil the environment by using of plastic materials; damage the Ozone layer of over-production of air pollution; mixing the waste contents into the oceans; destroying the ancient animals; ruin the forests and cut the trees. Certainly, We need the new
planet
to lead a healthy and tranquil life. For
this
reason, we should be allocated the funds but at the same time, we must
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and protect our
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and must
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a new
planet
for the future generation people. They really need a friendly environment.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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