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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#tendency #news #reports #media #focus #emergencies #developments #individuals #society
Media is very important for a
nation
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ery short time because of
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edia. But, nowadays
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edia mostly focused on problems and emergencies. For that reason,
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 media should follow up
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more positive developments and potentials sectors which can change the
nation
 and society. In today's progressing world, governments are more conscious
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 people. In every country around the world, every year a massive amount spent on many projects.
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 education, technology, crime and many more. Media
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 should telecast
such
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 People from
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 can easily accept what media show to them.
As a result
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 of progression would be declined with
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nation
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Besides
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 their life. The trend,
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rime rate is increasing day by day, for media, there is
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nly option to focused more on
such
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 to sustain and show their power. Because of that, every year a number of people are dying. In
such
 matters, media always come up with breaking news. To conclude, negative news always harmful
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 society even for individuals. Because
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 people find it very dangerous for them. Media needs to emphasize more on positive news.
This
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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