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New household appliances have resulted in more free time for women and has enabled them to both work and run a home with dependent children. What are the advantages for a family when the mother works? Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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We all are living a fast life and it is essential to bring out some
time
 for ourselves as well as for the family. It is true that the appliances have made life easy for everyone and it helps us to do things rapidly so we can save some
time
. There is a
lethora
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plethora
 of household equipment available in the market which can be used to clean and maintain the house quickly compared to do it manually. Some daily routine tasks of women
such
 as kneading dough take
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onsiderable
time
 for women to prepare the meal.
Hence
, technologically advanced machines can be used for the same. By the
time
 the appliance does it, a mother can spend some
time
 for her child to make them ready for the school. There is an advantage of using
such
 equipment so men can
also
 help women and women can conduct some other office related
work
. The major advantage of using the
atest
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 instruments for household
work
 can, of course, make life easy. Having said that, there are
also
 some disadvantages of the same. Electrical appliances could make you in trouble if those are not handled with care. In case of
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ower cut, the same
work
 has to be done manually and if you are dependent on the appliances, it will be difficult for the people to do the
work
 without appliances and doing it itself take much
time
. Appliances could be used to manage the
time
 for
work
 and for children but the women should
also
 understand that only use of appliances will not be useful for every
time
 and they need to be prepared for the worst
time
 too.
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