Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

In today's
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society. From
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early age, we have grown up with societies rule and laws. These are very threatening for most of us. In
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modern
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to live
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independent life. I think, every individual has
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rights to do anything
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because it would be beneficial for his life. In today's progressing
world
, all people have different views about every
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. Nowadays, youth have more ideas than adults. Because
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they have
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more opportunities for them. They are now living with technology, where, every impossible is possible for them.
However
, a free mind always better than those
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ave lots of question in mind. Keeping laws and rules in every
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would be dangerous for
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youth as well as for
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adults.
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a huge change in the
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ery good example. If we read the stories of these companies, we will know how they come up with big ideas. Where
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they do not even bother any rules and regulations in their plans. The trend,
on the other hand
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First
of all, not everyone is
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ame. Some people can misuse
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power in
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wrong way. In the same way, most of the adults and youth's are not so much conscious about laws. Sometimes they will forget about the laws and can do some unethical work.
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, societies should give chance to people to do some good
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. In that case,
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uman can make big changes in their life, as well as it will be good for society.
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  • social order
  • harmonious
  • individual freedoms
  • societal norms
  • unrestricted freedom
  • crime rates
  • dysfunctional
  • fair distribution
  • human rights
  • justice system
  • accountability
  • enforcing laws
  • restrictive regulations
  • societal functionality
  • legal frameworks
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