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Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? what is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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People achieve highs in their growth despite the fact they are not excellent in academics.
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 some people breakthrough in both school and real
life
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it has been noticed that the majority of them who failed in their study they set new milestones in their
life
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. Below will be discussed what motivates them to do exceptionally good in their career.
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 with, a prominent reason for their failure in the study could be lack of interest or they more likely to have another commitment in
life
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, it is always mandatory to follow a standard curriculum whereas some students are incapable to cope up with the burden of too many subjects and
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 fail at their academics.
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, from the latest survey done on students proof that who has more clear goals and passionate are certainly succeed in
life
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, the legitimate factor behind their success is their persistence and discipline which keeps them motivated and focused on their long-run objectives. Even though some people work hard in practical
life
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 but end up financial or mentally poor because lack of principals whereas successful people make decisions based on logic and reason they aware
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what and why they are doing it.
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, many athletes, artists or business people have or no schooling at all but yet they rise and achieve name and fame in
life
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. To recapitulate, perseverance is the key factor to succeed in if
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lend with the burning desire of person which leads them to attain a high standard in
life
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 regardless they fail in schools.
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