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1- Should a visitor to another country follow local customs, or should the host country welcome cultural differences? Discuss and make sure to give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people travel much more than before, thanks to how technology and marketing have advanced, we can see a lot of advertising promoting tourism in all parts of the world. In
this
 essay we will be able to debate or discuss if a visitor should follow the local customs of each
country
 or the host
country
 should welcome cultural differences.
First
, understanding and following the rules and customs of the
country
,
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 gives the visitor a great advantage
such
 as feeling confident and save with local inhabitants
,
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 and
also
 gives them the opportunity to blend themselves with the local culture.
For example
, in Greece there is a tradition of braking dishes,
this
 is carried out in large celebrations
such
 as weddings and birthdays and is done to express joy.
On the other hand
, getting used to and adapting to new customs is not always easy,
that is
 why I believe the host
country
 should
also
 show a friendly welcome to visitors.
In addition
, cultural diversity enriches a
country
 in many ways,
for example
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attracting international students improves the national economy.
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