Multicultural societies, where people of different ethnic groups live together, can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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China has a high population density

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, there are 56 peoples living there together, it is very inclusive.

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it has weaknesses. I agree that different ethnic groups living together. Because it can bring some convenient in our lives. Living together from different ethnic groups , they may bring some local foods or souvenirs in there, which can improve their hometown economy. Let more other people know

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their foods and cultures. While

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people can learn their languages, it is

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ood way to learn

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their cultures.

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, they will know some new neighbours and friends to talk with their hometown culture or food. And

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more and more people will interest in these things. People will very convenient to buy export foods. Another benefit is that it can improve Chinese crafts and technologies. Different people can

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and study with each other. And they can learn different languages that it can improve

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economy and science. People are very convenient to learn some knowledgeable to invent some technologies and objects.

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, different people live together, the population

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complexity. The

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are very different, so it is very easy to take a place to argue. And more people living there, the traffic will more and more

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, it is not very convenient to study. In conclusion, I believe that living together is very convenient

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people. Not only buy some export food

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each other.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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250 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural exchange
cultural fabric
traditions and perspectives
innovation
economic growth
social cohesion
tolerance and understanding
unity in diversity
cultural clashes
language barriers
multilingualism
integration
translation services
prejudice
diversity

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Multicultural societies, where people of different ethnic groups live together, can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Should hunting be considered a sport? Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. What are the reasons for this trend? And what possible solutions could reduce this issue?

In many countries government are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money.

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.