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Multicultural societies, where people of different ethnic groups live together, can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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China has a high population density
country
, there are 56 peoples living there together, it is very inclusive.
Although
 it has weaknesses. I agree that different ethnic groups living together. Because it can bring some convenient in our lives. Living together from different ethnic groups , they may bring some local foods or souvenirs in there, which can improve their hometown economy. Let more other people know
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their foods and cultures. While
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 people can learn their languages, it is
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ood way to learn
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their cultures.
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, the black
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 to my
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, they will know some new neighbours and friends to talk with their hometown culture or food. And
then
 more and more people will interest in these things. People will very convenient to buy export foods. Another benefit is that it can improve Chinese crafts and technologies. Different people can
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 and study with each other. And they can learn different languages that it can improve
country
 to
country
 economy and science. People are very convenient to learn some knowledgeable to invent some technologies and objects.
On the other hand
, different people live together, the population
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 complexity. The
life styles
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 are very different, so it is very easy to take a place to argue. And more people living there, the traffic will more and more
crowded
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, it is not very convenient to study. In conclusion, I believe that living together is very convenient
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 people. Not only buy some export food
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 but
also
 get
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each other.
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