Being a celebrity – such as a movie star or professional athlete – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or drawbacks?
In
this
contemporary world, everyone has to be famous at once in their life. In the case of celebrities, some of them might think that it itself creates issues as well as
goods
things, in which both sides Change the noun form
good
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
its
own brighter side and darker side. Correct pronoun usage
their
This
essay shows how the brighter side of famous people
affects their life
.
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Firstly
, in the case of film actors, they could get a high paid
salary because of their popularity Verb problem
apply
among
society which might help them to live in luxury growth altogether. Change preposition
in
For example
, famous actors buy new branded luxury cars, clothing or accessories which would create a higher position in the community. When there is an important function lead
by any famous company would call them to come and Wrong verb form
led
made
them a special guest. Wrong verb form
make
Thus
, they would get a high ranking in society.
Additionally
, more people
would recognise when
they went to a place and Correct pronoun usage
them when
asked
for Wrong verb form
ask
the
autograph which could help them to be famous in their career. To be a successful professional, they have to create a fans association by bringing good hearts together. Change the word
their
For instance
, many actors have their own fan club
in which if they want anything to get ready, they Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
would
always Wrong verb form
will
there
for them. Add a missing verb
be there
Hence
, Correct article usage
a celebrity
celebrity
lifetime was an enjoyable period that could Change noun form
celebrity's
recognise
Wrong verb form
be recognised
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
their whole lifespan.
In conclusion, in my opinion, famous Change preposition
throughout
people
get an ideal part of getting and knowing by
the Change preposition
apply
people
around them. So being a famous person is good to compare to the common people
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