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Many educational institutions give greater importance to subjects related to science and ignore subjects such as drama and literature. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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It has been asserted that the majority of educational organisations preferred to study science subjects rather than arts and literature due to a concept that Scientific knowledge is necessary to learn for a better future and career. I,
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 approach quite optimistic as World needs more advancements which are only possible if we have studied Science and Technology. To commence, Science studies are preferred in a major number of educational institutes. The most important reason, by and large, is the need for these studies in the development of our career and prosperity of a
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. To illustrate, Scientists can earn more wealth due to their research like a vaccine is made for Hepatitis C recently, for which they received a Nobel price and cash of 1.1million dollar.
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, advancements in technology render a
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 safe both economically and from wars.
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, Nuclear weapons can provide cheaper energy which in turn reduce the cost of electricity to ordinary citizens of a
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. Moving forward, studying science rather than arts and literature is quite a positive development in term of financial stability for a
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.
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 is because scientific development can earn more benefits while literature cannot. To cite an example, the prestigious fighter jets F-17 has manufactured by the government of Pakistan in collaboration with the Chinese government at very low prices while our neighbour
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 bought their fighter jets from France which cost them a huge sum of their annual budget. So the technological advancements can help a
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 to stand on its own two feet. To conclude, I reiterate that Science studies must be a focus of the educational institutions as it produces a positive impact on the economy of a
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 and improves the security of a
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 as well.
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